(What happened to the rest of Yardbrain 3?) The cow story is excellent, and almost functions just as well without the second page. The ghostly ending is also hilarious and the pizza story should seriously happen and also the paragraph about Frank's arm movements was so good. Also I think horse leashes are called reins, and "noises covered in dirt" is an amazing fragment, and also there was a typo in the second sentence in the sixth to last paragraph in item 9 ("I wanted to tell Mark that I he was acting like an idiot...") and also "I'll go tell the team we're not punching you in the face anymore." might be my new favorite sentence.
This has been the greatest thing I've read in the past few weeks
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(What happened to the rest of Yardbrain 3?) The cow story is excellent, and almost functions just as well without the second page. The ghostly ending is also hilarious and the pizza story should seriously happen and also the paragraph about Frank's arm movements was so good. Also I think horse leashes are called reins, and "noises covered in dirt" is an amazing fragment, and also there was a typo in the second sentence in the sixth to last paragraph in item 9 ("I wanted to tell Mark that I he was acting like an idiot...") and also "I'll go tell the team we're not punching you in the face anymore." might be my new favorite sentence.
This has been the greatest thing I've read in the past few weeks
hahahaha thanks dude!! glad you liked it!
i'm hoping to get a few more out this summer
yardbrain # 3 is just those 4 songs, but i'm going to write down the lyrics and publish them in the same layout.. have to get on that soon...
I've read the story about Bugel and Poorly before. Where did you publish it? I love "the leash or whatever it's called."
I also really liked the elephant-revenge story. I think we can all learn from that.
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